Problems with Poetry 1: Critiquing Other’s Work

A couple of weeks ago I wrote a post on how to take criticism on your poems. I suggest that you all go read that before proceeding here, where I’m going to talk about how to critique someone else’s poems.

Firstly, I suggest you read the poem over a couple times. If it’s really long (think Paradise Lost) then you don’t need to do this, but since most poems are less than 300 words you can probably afford to read it through about three times to get a good feel for it. Before starting to write your critique you should make sure you know what the poem is talking about. It’s often helpful to include a quick, one-sentence summary of the poem in your review, just so the writer knows if it’s too clear, or not clear enough.

Then, you’ll want to give some advice. Remember, be specific. It doesn’t help at all to say ‘I noticed some problems with the rhythm.’ Instead, say ‘The last line of the third stanza is a little too long.’ Also, don’t just say you liked the feeling of the poem. Say exactly what you liked. Poem critiques seem to be very vague, but those don’t help the poem.

Here are a couple specific things you can watch out for:

1.       Rhythmic problems. If you find yourself stumbling over words then they should probably re-word it. Tell them where you stumbled and why. You can give them a suggestion for how to fix it, but don’t expect them to use your exact words. It is their poem, after all.

2.       Boring words. This especially applies to rhyming poems. If I see one more person rhyme ‘night’ and ‘light’ and ‘bright’ then I’m going to hurt them…  Also, check for generic words like laugh, sing, night, day, happy, sad, gone, life, death, etc. Poetry is about being original, and those words aren’t going to help.

3.       Boring expressions. Writing about ‘a night black as ink’ or ‘silky smooth hair’ or something like that will just make the poem feel cliché. Point out any clichés you notice.

And of course, remember to be balanced. Don’t just point out the problems; make sure to mention exactly what you like. Be specific, but talk a bit about big picture stuff. In short, write a thoughtful, helpful critique, just as if you were reading a short story or novel. Why not head right over to inkpop.com and read some poetry right now?

University is Done

University is done.

Well, not quite. My last exam is on Tuesday, so I’m spending the weekend studying really hard. I wasn’t happy with my marks on the midterms, so I want a really good final. But aside from that, everything else is done. My other exam was on Wednesday and I think it went pretty well. Right now, a portfolio, an essay, a research paper and my journal entries are sitting in the English office at UPEI, ready to get picked up. All together, those are worth 135% of my mark (spread over two courses.) I’ll probably go pick them up on Monday, and I know I’ll be nervous.

It feels a little strange to be finished. For the past three months (and especially these last two weeks) University has been my life. I wrote three midterms, twenty-one journal entries, three 1000-word essays, and three drafts of a 3000 word research paper. I read several new poems, short stories and plays, and two famous epic poems (Paradise Lost and the Aeneid.) I’ve been really busy.

But now that is over. The crazy busyness is done until September. My friends who are in school are all a little jealous since they have three months left (well, it’s closer to two now). I suppose I should be really excited, and in a way I am. It feels nice not to have so much work. But, in a way, I feel a little lost. There’s nothing urgent to keep me going, no deadlines, so marks to fret over. It’s not like I’ll be bored, not with a novel to edit, another one to write, and a couple million books to read. I just won’t feel as busy. There won’t be deadlines constantly pushing me on. I won’t have to do anything.

As much as I hate the feeling of needing to hand in an essay at the end of the week (and still not knowing what to write!), I think I enjoy working under pressure. At very least, I get things done. It’s going to be a bit of a battle to make sure I actually do anything writing-related this summer. Wish me luck!

As for all my loyal blog readers: what are your big plans this summer? Will you be reading? Writing? Working? On vacation? I’d love to hear what you guys have planned for the summer! 

John Milton: Paradise Lost

For my weekly post about University, I couldn't help but talk for a minute about Paradise Lost, since I enjoyed the course so much. Sorry if I bore you, but I absolutely love this poem.

John Milton is the author of Paradise Lost, the greatest English epic. The poem is 10,565 lines long, divided into 12 books. It tells the story of Creation, Adam and Eve and the Fall of Mankind. At UPEI there is a whole course devoted to it which I’m taking this semester and absolutely loving. There is just so much in it; Milton’s poetry is excellent and the religious questions which he raises stimulate a lot of discussion in class.

What I love about Milton is how he writes Satan. Satan is completely evil, yet he still appears heroic and almost noble. This is my favourite passage from Book 1: (lines 249-263)

… Farewell happy fields

Where joy forever dwells! Hail horrors, hail

Infernal world! And thou, profoundest Hell,

Receive thy new possessor, one who brings

A mind not to be changed by place or time!

The mind is its own place and in itself

Can make a Heaven of Hell, a Hell of Heaven.

What matter where, if I be still the same

And what I should be: all but less than He

Whom thunder hath made greater? Here at least

We shall be free. The Almighty hath not built

Here for His envy, will not drive us hence.

Here we may reign secure, and in my choice

To reign is worth ambition, though in Hell:

Better to reign in Hell than serve in Heaven!

Who, after reading that, could not admire Satan just a little? That’s what Milton does so well. He takes the worst ‘bad guy’ of them all and makes him interesting. In doing this, he shows just how easy it is to mistake evil for good. Think of Hitler, and how he deceived all the Germans.

Some people like Paradise Lost because they like how Satan is a ‘good guy’. I like it for precisely that reason. Milton writes him so well that people think he’s good when in fact they’re completely wrong. Throughout the whole poem Satan remains an interesting character with several fascinating speeches.

I strongly suggest that everyone should read some of Paradise Lost. It’s referenced in numerous other stories (C.S. Lewis’s The Magician’s Nephew  and The Screwtape Letters as well as the new YA novel I Am Number Four of all things!) and is a great addition to your literary education. As my professor says, it is ‘dense, allusive, soul-toughening, but not dull.’ 

How I got into University

The new student center

For most people getting into University is pretty straightforward. Homeschoolers, however, find it a little bit more difficult since most of us don’t have marks and we might not have worked through specific courses. Throughout my highschool years I had a specific Science (Apologia) and Math (Singapore) curriculum but everything else was pieced together from various sources. This makes it difficult to convince a University that I had completed highschool.

This is how I ended up in University half a year early. It’s not the traditional way of doing things, but I know more and more homeschoolers who are trying this method and it certainly worked well for me.

UPEI has one of the only vet colleges in Canada

Last fall (September-November 2010) I took one course from UPEI. Getting into one course is relatively easy. I simply met with the Dean of Arts, bringing along a couple samples of my writing. He was a very agreeable man and let me into UPEI as a part time student without even looking at my writing samples! The course I decided to take was a simple Introduction to Literature course taught by a wonderful professor.

During this course I read two books of Milton’s epic poem Paradise Lost. My professor was teaching a third year course on Milton the next semester, and she kindly allowed me to take it despite my age. Since I had been admitted into one course and I had no real plans for homeschooling in the next term, I decided that I might as well try to go to UPEI full time. I don’t actually want to go to UPEI for my full University career, but being a full time student will make it much easier to transfer somewhere else.

Cass Building, where my Dad works

My dad (who is a math professor at UPEI) talked to the registrar several times. I made up a small (four page) portfolio showing the courses I had done in highschool, as well as all the extracurricular activities I am involved in (drama, writing, dance, volunteer work…etc…). The registrar took their time reading this, so when courses started I wasn’t actually enrolled as a student yet. I went to class anyways, just hoping that they’d let me in. Two weeks into the term, on the deadline for registration, the registrar finally got back to me. I was in!

Now I’m in my seventh week (the home stretch!) of full time University, and I love it. I’m taking two English courses and two History. English is my favourite, but I’m thinking of doing a History minor. My midterms are done, which is great, and I didn't do too badly.

The Main Building at UPEI

For all homeschoolers who want to get into University and don’t want to spend forever compiling a transcript and doing SATs, I’d suggest taking a course as a part time student and then getting your status switched to full time. Doing a course is a great way to prove that you’re capable, and you earn a credit at the same time. I admit that I had an easier time getting in since my dad teaches at UPEI, but I believe anyone can do it. I know of at least three other homeschoolers who’ve done the same thing at UPEI in recent years. A University’s registration rules may seem strict but what they really want are students who are capable and willing to work. Any homeschooler who is coming up to graduation and wants to get into University should consider taking a course part time in their grade 12 year.